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Psapfo 1 & 2

He dips his finger
into the tiny nectar jar

she quivers into a breeze
over the face of the ocean

Psapfo laments
a broken covenant

her ancient heart
flowing with a maiden's blood

she laughs in her delirium
a storm on the heavens

"tear my rich garments
tear me to shreads…

...this light between us
is a flame in my breast...

...holy Eros"

2

invisible
Aegean woman
kisses pearls from the thighs of the Psapfic poet

because sometimes
Zeus loves to taste
more than the tenth part

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Hi, Dalton,
I researched a bit (and there is still quite a lot more) to try to fully understand your poem. It is lovely, sensual, and poetic. I know there is somewhat of a connection between Zeus and Eros - father and son? Which leads to parts 1 and 2? I plead ignorance to understanding Greek mythology, but did read that Plato himself coined Psapfo as the "Tenth Muse" due to her illustrious poetic creations, very much like your last line. Much to learn and enjoy here.
Thank you!
L

Psapfo (Sappho) born about 612 B.C. in either Eressos or Mytilini on the island of Lesbos, Sappho wrote lyric poems in her own Aiolic dialect, in which she referred to herself as Psapfo. Zeus yes he is the father of the gods in the Greek pantheon. Eros is the god of love and its many aspects but usually of a sexual nature over platonic. There are many myths of Zeus taking the form of lesser creatures to hide his amorous intentions toward human women from Hera mother of the gods. Although Psapfo, or Sappho was a real historical character and a favourite poet of mine the story of this poem is just extrapolation from the myths hopefully she would approve.

Thanks for reading John :)

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not sure of the last line it was originally:

sometimes Zeus
loves to play
the female part

the idea for the tenth part comes from the Greek adage:

'If the parts of love-pleasure be counted as ten,
Thrice three go to women, one only to men.'

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Love both versions of the last line equally!
Thank you for this!
L

yes that's the problem for me too

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the explanation of the 'tenth part'. How well you have extrapolated. Good stuff. ~ Geezer.
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