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Proverbs of faith

As sweet honeycomb
Pleasant words heal the spirit
Refreshing the soul.

An old proverb re-vamped.

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Good to see! All and any help is welcome - I really appreciate your input. "Words Of Faith" sounds good - see how it goes with other suggestions.

Thanks Shirl - your a sweetie!

Love Mand xxxxxx

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this. It is also one of my favorite forms. I think I might have used a different word than [bones]. Maybe core, or something indicating the center of the body. All in all, a very thought provoking poem. ~ Gee

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Good to see you. Yeh! good idea I'll work on that. I appreciate your imput.

Thanx Geezer!

Love Mand xxxxxx

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Good to see you! I've been experimenting with Senryu and Haiku. I'll try some other style out if I can.

Hope you are o.k - I will come by to see your poems soon - maybe not until Monday!! hopefully before.

Keep safe

Love Mand xxxxxxxxx

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Oh sweet sweet the honeyed words
spread out their perfumed air
and touch us all,
and us enthral.

Sweet honeyed words
Spread their perfumes freely
Deep cure

Oh just messing Mand.
I like the thought behind this very much.

Love Ann.

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

Great to see you! Sounds like bacon! Ha ha only joking.

Love and hugs!

Mand xxxxxxxxxx

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well thought out Haiku...............stan

Hheeellllloooooo. My husband speaks like that when he answers the phone - cracks me up.

Great to hear from ya.

Love to family and all

Mand xxxxxxxxxxxxx

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I hope you and Zak are o.k. I have to admit I hijacked the idea for this poem - because I really like the sentiments - so I kinda cheated.

glad you liked it.

Thanks for reading and commenting.

Loads of love

Mand xxxxxx

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Wise words that help us live better lives.

Thanks for reading and commenting Amalzamani.

Love to you

Mand xxxxxxxxxxxxx

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Soo good to see you. Glad you liked this little poem. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.

Love to you and your family.

Mand xxxxxxx

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Your advice was excellent - I appreciate your input.

Thanks Shirl.

Love Mand xxxxxxxxx

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"ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh"..

raj (sublime_ocean)

Lovely!!!

I agree - refreshing the soul - nice to have the soul refreshed.

Thanks for your encouragement Mona - always good to hear from you.

Love

Mand xxxxxxxxx

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