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Protection
Autumn Rain
Summer Storm
Keep me safe
Keep me warm
Protect me
From the winter’s cold
The growing list
Of fears untold
Hold my body
Close to yours
Kiss the scars
And heal the sores
You hold my heart
Now here’s the key
Unlock the cage
And set me free
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Ian.T
Tue, 2013-03-05 09:59
Splinters
Liked how this one sang, just a couple of tiny things:-
(The) growing list
(Of) fears untold
From (the) winter’s cold.
(And) heal the sores.
(And) set me free..
There are a few words that can go and still some more without losing the plot or the reader, loved it,
Yours Ian.T
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