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Golden Steps to churn the pot
One day is a hit while the other is not
Solid foundation
Yet no stones on top
Thy grey steps destroy the pot
Clear sight, yet blind to the skies
Divine dining only to die
Thy improper method to cook
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Candlewitch
Tue, 2022-03-01 10:22
hello,
I'm not sure I understood your poem. could you explain it to me? thank you,
*hugs, Cat
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Basically Deep
Wed, 2022-03-16 18:26
Golden steps to churn the pot
Golden steps to churn the pot - Making progress (having a productive day)
One day is a hit while the other is not (one good day (productive) one is bad)
solid foundation, yet no stones on top - You have a good base (you may have a good job but NOT a great job. You may be able to write okay but not GREAT.
clear sigh yet blin to the skys. Can see one day at a time (you can see your 9-5) but you lack a vision you lack the ability to see yourself in 30 years being rich and only focus on the now with no dreams.
Improper method to cook - Your day to day actions are no going to help you 'churn the pot' to a life conducive yo your goals. ppl watch too much netflix and don't do the thing they need to do.
Divine dining only to die - you may be in a good restrunt (expensive, wealth etc, but you lack the proper legacy / sustainable income because while you may be wealthy it may all be a waste if you lack legacy. If this interests you I highly suggest you read my recent post
author commentCandlewitch
Thu, 2022-03-17 08:58
thank you
for the explanations, it helped greatly. I employed this while rereading your poem. I think it is brilliant! and agree with your philosophy.
*hugs, Cat
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