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Professional Liars

Submitted by alidzain on Fri, 2016-07-22 16:06

I've seen and heard
the whims of liars in coats,
the grand manipulators
who try to rock the boat,

They prance about on stage,
delivering their promises
and then discard their words.
They snort at a thousand curses.

I witness them, hunting for votes
that fools will give in full support.
Without an eye to see the truth,
their history, a broken record.

This cycle repeats itself in time,
making it a legitimate crime.
Their lies aren't worth a dime
just another act that's full of slime.

Unless the stubborn fools
deny their votes and stop being dumb
they'll always be the tools
the liars need to raise their income.

Style / type:

Free verse

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Editing stage:

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Comments

Esker

Fri, 2016-07-22 21:38

harmonius state

why poets are gathered up in purges
some saved..some gassed
but we speak out
why?
because we believe

idealists..yes
dangerous...
perhaps

life on the edge
is never easy
its a long way down
.and when the ankle
biters grab you
shake em

shake em hard!!!!

alidzain

Sat, 2016-07-23 21:36

Thanks

for the visit, the read and comment.

Alid

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Geezer

Sat, 2016-07-23 11:23

of metaphor, rhyme and truth! As long as the powers that be are not afraid of us, we are safe!
When we can rouse the segment of society that truly wants change, rather than just a bump up of status and position, then we need fear! ~ Gee

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

alidzain

Sat, 2016-07-23 21:41

Gee

there are some politicians whomI wish I could just give a good kick on the butt for their views. I see Donald Trump and I wonder if he even knows what he is saying. On the other side, I find people here hating Hillary Clinton as well. Personally, I don't envy the people's choice. Well that's just politics.

Anyway, thank you for the visit, the read and the comment.

Alid

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Esker

Sun, 2016-07-24 06:47

politics is a brawl

and the people love the winners
outcomes are what history becomes
socialists got in
Ogliarchs ran generations
russia...france
before popular media
proper propaganda
began to find that pulse
in the sway of conscious
effort

someone will win

the New Tommorow
The New Order
will arrive

and then we will
see what direction
will evolve from
this

this north america is
not even five hundred
years old as far
as organized habitation
there are roofs on
european towns older
then that
blood lines on islands
of power reaching
from time immomorial

slave classes built all
countries
like the exportation
of work for affordable
product

if the ruling class with
its deals and secret
socieites and armed
gaurds were not there
the weaker of the
groups would be
absorbed by the
stronger...

but evolution
creates a king today
a tyrant tommorrow
and before long
the empire crumbles
like Rome
Like the Pharoahs
Mayans
Vikings

if everything fell
tommorrow
could I garden
haul water
be in a hunting
party
assist leaders
and be a leader
to a small work
party

why I stay in shape
keep a fresh mind
stay in contact
with the top brass
and the lowly
peasants....
each has the tendrils
of intel....contact
trail

in every revolution
survivalist
and subjecated
mass supression
man has always
survived

the pearl and diamond
of individuality
our inner fire
for our own life
and others....

thank U!

alidzain

Sun, 2016-07-24 14:41

Thanks, Esker

for the visit, the read and the comment.

Alid

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