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Prince of Darkness... [March Contest]

A diary of bloody horror
Set in Translyvanian wood
A tale of vampirism
A damsel sweet and good

Six hundred some-odd pages
A tragic tale is told
Of the Prince of darkness
And the secrets in his hold

The story of a hero
A staid and youthful heart
Who saw an evil thing
And bravely did his part

He faced terror and he triumphed
Saved the maiden fair
Slew the evil monster
And took her away from there

Bram Stoker wrote this tale
Made old Vlad a star
Created Dracula the vampire
Famous near and far

Fascinating stuff
I read it in three days
Got hooked on horror tales
And I still ain't changed my ways

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
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Comments

you can't miss with a poem about Vlad, the Impaler. Good rhyming, too, but I'll wear a heavy scarf around my neck till the March comp. has ended. Jerry

It was the first book I ever checked out of the library! Mrs. Moore spent lots of time with me after school; helping me learn to read. When we left for summer break, she asked me to get a library-card and read some that summer and even though I would not be in her class the next year; come back and let her know what I had read. It was hard at first, but I was so engrossed in the story, that I kept reading and it got easier and easier over the next three days! By the time I went back in the Fall, I was a proficient reader, reading way above the sixth-grade level. I wrote a poem about her called "Mrs. Moore Gave Moore". You might like it. I'm sure that she would be proud of all the books that I have read and that I've become a poet.
~ Geezer.
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author comment

straight away Geezer. You have it beginning and ending perfectly and the rhythm etc. is fine.
I find no fault with this spooky tale and enjoyed the read. Well done.

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