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PRICE OF FREEDOM

It was in their very interest first
To scramble and partition the land
Stretching transversely the whole continent
For global economic adventures
In free and independent Africa

Our land of great ancestral heritage;
They all came in flocks of thousands to feed
Like lean vultures and other scavengers
The wolves disguised as sheep, harmless they seemed
Bearing the Lord’s Holy Grail with closed hands

For the needy supplicating souls here
They came with wine, residue and jewels
For our fancy and intoxication
They came for the lost, to save and to serve
To figure her Majesty’s Government

With wild claims of Divine Authority
And strings to wrestle a puppet in dance
To tunes of metallic shots and bombshells
And songs of victorious exploitation
Amid odium, we fight and slay one another

That was the price we paid for our freedom
When boats and ships appeared on the shorelines
Resisting monarchs were carried away
And stooges were imposed on the people
Uncertainty is now the new order

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A friend in my neighborhood queried the sad content in some of my writings and I gave the analogy of an artist painting an old man's face, of course, the painting will capture the contour, the wrinkles and even the scars. Ignoring these, will not reflect the true condition of the face. The elements in this write are our realities. Thank you for the comments and best wishes

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