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Potus Sauron

[In case you haven't read 'Lord of the Rings' I'll post the original verse that this parodies as first comment]

Three sickly saplings for trees under the sky
Seven cents an hour for the miners in their tombs of stone
Nine gold umbrellas for CEOs to keep the lie.
One for the greased Potus in his oval orifice,
In the land of the free where the children die.
One Psycho to to rule them all, one Psycho has already found them,
one Psycho to build a wall and in the darkness bind them
In the land of the free, where Creationism lies.

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Three Rings for the Elven-kings under the sky,
Seven for the Dwarf-lords in their halls of stone,
Nine for Mortal Men doomed to die,
One for the Dark Lord on his dark throne
In the Land of Mordor where the Shadows lie.
One Ring to rule them all, One Ring to find them,
One Ring to bring them all and in the darkness bind them,
In the Land of Mordor where the Shadows lie.

cheers,
Jess
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Sauron, pretending to be a nice guy, forged rings of power that helped the elves maintain their beautiful realms, helped the dwarves mining and building for the deep hidden treasures they so valued, gave men the power they craved most of all. But he forged one ring that could control and enslave them all.

Thanks for "When you get political you are outstanding", I appreciate it. I'm a bit like that new member Aeron, I think poetry should shake things up a bit.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

author comment

I like it Jess. I'll never forget the original words. LOTR is up there with my fav books and movies. A lot of people didn't like the Hobbit but i love all 6 movies. They are my go to when i dont know what to watch.

I really think when you write politically loaded verse ? Like Mark said outstanding :-)

Cheers J x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

A bitter write, yes children die and creationism, and
doctors are afraid to give hope because if the promissed recovery is complecated they will be sued.
Old folks plaing slot machines is also something to think about.
But my gardner who started as a boy soldger loves this country.
My neighbor feeds deer. I write. What else can I do besides feeling incomplete and sorry?

IRiz

A good parody of the rings speech. Good to know you support our prez so strongly

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