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pornstar or whiskey

You call me up again
And I already know
I can almost smell
The whiskey through the phone

The bottle is empty
But you need more
Too much of a gentleman
To call up a whore

I don’t mind if my lips help
Replace a bottle of jack

I don’t mind if my bottle like curves
Keep bringing you back

I can bring the peace the bottle never brings itself
But why convince you that I'm the one you need
When I can settle
as porn star or whiskey

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
When I write it's usually just something in my head so I feel as if how I write sounds very "teenage girl" and I'm trying to figure out ways to sound more romantic and mature in my words because most themes in my writings are over love, obsession, sadness, etc. But I wrote this poem about a guy I talked to for almost two years. He said he loved me, but I found myself a completely different person sometime towards the end of the relationship. I noticed that he didn't see me as a girl, as a person, he saw me as - in my words- a "porn star". In turn I began to see myself that way and because I felt I loved him so much I let myself be his vice. Even if that meant he only texted me after 10 pm and used me. I always felt empathy for him though because I could see he wasn't an awful person, he just had a lot of bad things going on and he didn't know how to handle them.
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Explicit Content

Comments

Hi Renae
You said
"I'm trying to figure out ways to sound more romantic and mature in my words because most themes in my writings are over love, obsession, sadness, "
...but what do you mean when you say "more romantic" - You poem is a tell it like it is poem - it is a great statement as it is - I would hope you get more raw and edgy in your writing rather than more romantic as you mature. In my view poetry that could almost be the thoughts in your mind as they happen is what gives the edge. Don't lose it by trying to be too romantic.
By the way - you have labelled it "explicit" - it doesn't sound very explicit to me - I am as new as you here but I don't think this poem is explicit.
Will

Thanks for the reply. I put explicit because I'm new here and not quite sure what is considered explicit and what isn't. And by more romantic, I'm not really sure either, most poetry I read is very metaphorical and seems professional, which is kind of how I want to write as well. Thanks for the feedback!

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