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Point Of No Return

Point Of No Return

you invade my space...
don't push or crowd me
or you could get hurt,
you do this a lot?
you prod and push
to find the weak spot
testing, always testing,
to see just how far
is too far, to find
the point of anothers
breaking...
then you run,
screaming for help
you think being of
the feminine sex
nullifies the rules
not true!
I'm surprised
no one has taught you
a painful lesson by now
your insensitivity
could be your fateful end
by-anyone's-god
today you will learn!

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Last few words: 
this poem is about my husband's sister. she hated me from the minute she met me. at our wedding she went around telling my NEW relatives some very private things about me, things I had entrusted to Steve. things that were very painful. he thought he could trust his sister. a few months later, we were visiting his mother, and Wendy happened to be there. also his cousins and their mates were there. we were sitting at the table having lunch. Wendy started cattily picking at me. after a short time I'd had enough. I called her on it...told her to meet me in the back yard and we would settle it. something in my voice and eyes scared her bad and she went in the bathroom, locked the door and stayed there! Ron, one of the cousins apologized to me for her and talked me out of beating the crap out of her...it took a lot of talking!
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Is what I get from your piece. It’s pretty intense, and I woukd have not wanted to be on the other end of this!

If that was your intention in the words you chose, and the readability of this, then you succeeded!

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that is exactly it!!! you have it! thank you for reading and responding!

*hugs, Cat

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is intersting

thank you.

*hugs, Cat

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