Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

The Poet's Words (with spoken word)(Limerick WS)

Whatever the poets would write,
if dark or those of delight,
they must affect,
and well reflect,
for the blind and the one with sight.

https://soundcloud.com/rula68/the-poets-words-1

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
How does this theme appeal to you?
Last few words: 
I have added a record so you tell me how bad or good was that
Editing stage: 

Comments

Good write with a message in your limerick. See if the suggested tweak below works for you

Whatever be a poetic write,
be it dark or of delight,
let it affect,
cause to reflect,
the blind and those with sight.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

and thanks for your comment and the suggestions. I believe the same massage can be delivered in millions ways.
Have your suggestions come to smooth the rhythm or for other purpose?

❤❤❤❤❤❤

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

Follow me
www.instgram.com/rularules1

author comment

Not sure if the suggestion is smooth or good on rhyme

raj (sublime_ocean)

you have achieved both serious content and lyricism

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet is a workshop. Poets take the time to read and think about your work and offer suggestions.
There is no obligation to make any changes however please acknowledge critique and comments.

(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.