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Poems Never Written

I wanted to write a poem about

My being a butterfly,
delicate and shy

And tell you,
How I came out of my chrysalis
To become a Rhino, big and strong
And how, I now have the thickest skin
That gives me courage
And the will to be me.
But I never wrote it.

Nor the poem about,
How I'd lay under the silver maple,
That's where I met Henry,
He was also looking for shade one day,
It's fifty years we have been shading there together.
We've shared all the scars of life,
And it still feels like the first day we met
I just didn't think I could write about it,

If I could have written a poem
I would have Written it in hope,
Of World Change,

where I could speak to the public
About the positive we could achieve
If we were all united in peace and good will,
no matter what color, race, or religion

Such a shame though,
I never had the guts to write it,

I think a part of that butterfly
still remains within me, after all.

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Rula's Title so thank you Rula.
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the poem I like yup could have, should have didn't is a common story
the only things that bothered me is the way you formatted your lines

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I know I need to tidy it if you have any ideas let me know, I just wrote this! Ok done a small edit!

Thank you...Teddy

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better thank you

Our chat room is not only there for Thursday afternoon chat 3:30-4:30
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Thank you! It was brand new yesterday and I so appreciate all who come to give their ideas

Thank you...Teddy

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That was so quick. Have I mentioned prolific poets yet?[grins]
You honored me with your writing dear.

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to this one
Lol... remember, it's my title.

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Always lol

Thank you I just love it, I found it a wonderful title

Thank you...Teddy

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about being part butterfly. If you have to be a butterfly, be a Monarch; they live for a couple of years and make enormous flights to come back and mate. You just haven't found your story yet. When you do... it will be the greatest butterfly tale ever. Nicest poem of chrysalis I've ever read. ~ Geezer.
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Dear Geezer, do you think I should use chrysalis? I actually like it much more than cocoon, what do you think can I get away with it?

Thank you...Teddy

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it's true to say when i wake up most of the USA is going to sleep,
so i just wanted to say i couldnt wait to change cocoon with
chrysalis, i think it brings it so much more, i am really grateful you give me the time, and make me think about my work.

let me know if it works! when you wake up, of course

Thank you...Teddy

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to give anything I can to the poets here. Especially those that are so fervent about their works. You have been an inspiration to keep giving; when there have been times that I didn't feel as though I wanted to work that day. I love that you couldn't wait to get back to your poem and make a change that you saw might give your work a better line. Yes, I think it works very well. ~ Geezer.
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Our Chatroom is open 24/7 Feel free to use it for
keeping in touch We have poets around the world and it is fun
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Thank you for such kind words, this was a title I chose from one of rula's on the last phase of our workshop, I hope I did it justice.

Thank you...Teddy

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Hello, Teddy!
I found it so interesting that you chose to become a rhino in your poem. A couple of their many spiritual symbolic characters is said to be confidence and peace of mind. How fitting for your poem! I think I've read most of your poetry here and it seems you've had the guts to write about most everything you've mentioned in this poem! I always enjoy!
Thank you!
L

how lovely to see you! i actually took this oppotunity to really shine a light on at least one subject i would never be comfortable with writing and that would be politics, so i took full advantage of poetic licence.

i wish i was a rhino, in the sence i always felt strong and thick skinned but we as humas never could 100% i am quite sure of that!

thanks for taking the time to come over to my page, you are always welcome, This poem was born with a title that Rula, offered! and i am so glad she did!

Thank you...Teddy

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..that final exclamation mark at the end.
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xxx
Edna
Poet(ess) to the Stars

That's extremely kind of you.

Thank you...Teddy

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..are my pet hate.
!!!!!!!!
[See how annoying they are]
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xxx
Edna
Poet(ess) to the Stars

I just wanted to say this is too much to be under one title. I thought you've more than one poem here, but that's just a thought. I am sure you'll write about each in a separate poem one day.
Again, very well done!
The first stanza is my favorite BTW.

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poems never written, i have used the title literally! these are my poems never written,

yes maybe these will also apprear elsewhere some day.

Thank you for your kind consideration.

Thank you...Teddy

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