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A Poem is Metaphor

rational thought
a geometry of flatulence
a poem is metaphor

I can kill you in a poem
and walk away scot free
so bend over
I got a gun in your ass
ready aim bang
I love you

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How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Short and to the point. Just funny. In that very good sadistic way! Perfect

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

Thank you Mark Really appreciated!!

Best Z

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