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The Poem

the poem started with the word
it wasn't a good
it didn't sit on the page right
like a head with a bad perm
another poem started with the word

the the
had so much integrity;
it floated on the page like a sun drenched cathedral

i can only surmise the magic of a poem has in it the ineffable soul
of the writer
are the good writers nonchalant
talent dripping
or are they secretly fucking
their the's

sucking on
the the's
making them gleam
glowing hard
polishing them with a spit shine
so it sits on the page
with a sense of superiority

some poems are nothing but arm pit stains
no matter how good they are
black listed from love

sky-blue uniforms
with bright yellow kerchief's
you cant take your eyes from

they are
crowning glory

in the

God of the
peaked like a maraschino
with pastel and golden sprinkles
on a ball
of vanilla

a the
like a high end Mercedes
with the scent of lavender
and the magnitude of the

to kill for

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is good fun, and I'm always glad to read these type of poems. A "The" Poem.
easy to read and laugh with.

I get the image of sucking the the, as that is where we first got our primary nourishment, and works with sexual imagery to "pun around" with. It is its own stanza. I think copulating is a bit awkward for me in this poem, kinda comes out of nowhere.

Love the word sound and image of the Botafumeiro. And feels like it was enjoyable to write.

I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

Thank you. Im so glad you enjoyed this piece. I must have revised this poem a dozen times with all the the's I was getting dizzy
Im considering your insight about the word copulating Its very animal husbandry I suppose
Ill think of an alternative.....Ah yes …." are they secretly fucking their the's"

Thanks again

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