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Please O Poet Don’t Die ......>> Classic second

Submitted by lovedly on Fri, 2017-01-06 11:37

Please O Poet Don’t Die

If you do all that
lovemaking
whilst you two
are alive
see the comments would exceed
a beehive

you love her so much
never let her die
she will cry
ere you die

so live together
and see
who goes first
you or she
and
maybe if your love is so intense

you may both in a helicopter fly sky high
and drop dead holding hands
both will together enter
those unknown lands
as lovers alive

all will welcome

but don't die before me please

I'd love to hear someone crying
for me

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Editing - rough draft

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Sparrow

Fri, 2017-01-06 19:34

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There is no way we die before each other, it may seem that some journey on before us, but get rid of that time, screw it up fold it, and then check to see who lived or died first.
I am already greeting you at my cave entrance yet I have not moved from this plain.
A sojourn of the cosmos but not the one you see outside of your window.
Maybe they will know us as the in-betweeners as we can even live in the spaces of Space.
If all the population of the earth can be put on a small island just think of what we can do with the vastness of space then some.
Take care young Bard don't get tied up in maybe's
just get on with your poetic leanings,,
Yours as always Ian..

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lovedly

Fri, 2017-01-06 21:52

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Classic enough
Ian
please keep hot coffee ready
I soon will be coming
do welcome me

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Sparrow

Sat, 2017-01-07 03:39

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Sorry this didn't resonate with me as it was in parts classic and then to take a helicopter ride together, well that's not classic..
Had to rush back to change the tea to coffee, you will now see me with a cup in each hand.
We cannot see the future young Loved we can live only in the now, but in Spiritual beings the now is a multitude of beings and places to eternity and back,
Take care and keep writing, Yours Ian..

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Unconditional love to you all.
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lovedly

Sat, 2017-01-07 11:20

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okay don't worry
tea will do also
Ian

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