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Submitted by brittle light on Tue, 2013-11-12 07:19

when politicos come a'knockin'
power lusting
wielding rightousness as a badge
indignation as a weapon,
be forewarned

the future is the past

the pendulum swings left to right
and back again

a Poe pit mechanism
slicing the spoils
pitiless as their gods
extorting amens

lock your doors
better fire or flood
than politicos,
crying
for money
or blood

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

eightmenout

Tue, 2013-11-12 13:02

I always struggle with poems of a political nature. I feel that points can be made far better in a well written essay rather than in poetic form. However, I do think that it can be done if the time period is allowed to attack the words as opposed to the words attacking the time. I think you have a combination of both in this one and that a few additional lines setting the stage would make this one a lot more powerful.

Thanks for the post as I, myself, am waiting at the door for them to knock. I have a few words I would care to share with them.

Scott

Scott

Seren

Wed, 2013-11-13 07:47

Seren's picture

I had never been very interested in politics, but as I have gotten older I pay more attention to what they are spending our money on and the new laws they are passing or the old ones they are updating or changing, I think you have a good poem I would have liked a little bit more but what is, is :)

I think that our lives are only going to get harder the more they get us into debt the less money and standards of living we will have

love JC xxx

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