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In A Place of Pleasure

Just look at me
I have found a place to rest in pleasure
Not minding the mundane worries the world carries
I have set into a pathfinder garden
Bearing love and rest
In a chaotic circles of mother earth
Where noiseless impact of a heavy silence surround me

But some outside there
Are broadcast under the heavy doubled din trouble
In the middle of the night
When night came to vigil with us
The vile demons demonstrate their talents by directing
Negative night mares
Among the young and the old
Oppressing our gentle sleep slowly

If not God and his Angels
No soul would have returned peacefully
From the smooth night journeys of ours

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Good theme Jack. You may want to look at the punctuation and grammatical aspects to uplift it.
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raj (sublime_ocean)

if i have understood your intent in the poem I am sharing my version of 1st Stanza and the title

In Tranquility

My feet ride on a serene path
to a tranquil place of birds and greens
far from the vicious cycle of life
of day dreams and sweating strife
in the silence I hear my beats
as I fly on the wings of bees
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raj (sublime_ocean)

I have adhered your instructions Sir.
Good edit!

Onyinyechi Cosmos

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