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Pillow talk

as she slumbers in her sleep
she mumbles
come home tonight
tis so dark
but he in some
Pillow talk on ones
else's arms
does naked stalk
can't walk
dead drunk,
my is he,

how he wishes
he was with thee

your poetry is not only lovely
tis sexy
says romantic poet
in me
so be happy!

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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This needs a tidy up, the line:-

Pillow talkones else's arms,
just needs an edit,

Good write otherwise, wasn't there another on the same lines a while back??? Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Pillow talk on ones
else's arms,

which one
don't cry babe?

author comment

It could still use a little more tidying up but its a good poem
as usual just needs you to work it a little more

love Jayne

btw its nice to see you actually working on some pieces
I read more than this one lol ;)

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

that you walk across
once again as before
regards and glad you are
as well once more...


lovedly purely technical

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