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Pieter

Hard at work is the Reaper Grim
Shape-shifting for evil within
Essence of death always present
Skeletal make of humankind

Flaunting tools of torture and death
No armor stops the blades slicing
From horror filled countenances
Life-line blood from jugular spills

Atop the wagon-wheel gallows
Raven sits on an empty nest
Tattered cloth and drifting hang-twine
Soulless wanderers scurry ‘bout

Everything in bile shades of green
Suffering amphibians hatch
Fully grown - to the Templar swords,
Ax and flames, where nothing lives past pain

Angel saints – butterfly serpents
All are here at the end of ends
Nothing remains but the death scent
Of rotten bled out food scrapings

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments

The poem sets up a nice gothic feeling using an archaic language style (as opposed to modern "The grim reaper is hard at work") and everything works nice. the language works, the images present themselves nicely in a somewhat cliche theme..which is fine, most subjects have a cliche aspect to them... but then the end, introducing "meaningless life" ...a very powerful line phrase which totally occupies the poem. It has no build up or reality for me from you. Why is life meaningless?? The poem immediately adapts that theme. Death is inevitable, freaky, gothic, finality...ok...but how does that make meaninglessness?

The poem has great images that paint a picture...the last statement is like making a Bosch like panting of Hell and with all the details and then taking a brush full of red and throwing it at the canvas..

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Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

Why do i need to do that?
Just gonna remove it!
Thanks,

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That's how I see it,

Mark L.

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This in my opinion is a masterpiece. It was conceived out of love of the art of Breugel and Bosch.
It conjures up some amazing very vivid imagery. It is a story of Hell and believe me you wouldn't want to go there. It can be quite gruesome to some readers and just a big WOW from others.
All in all I think the writer has quite a unique grasp on these two masters of genre art.,and I give him credit for tackling this bizarre genre. I only wish he'd do more of this because it lights up the website with his luminosity in understanding.

What an inspiring write up!
Been working on it like crazy.
Just have a look at the revisions.
Trying to capture the artists minds without chasing rabbits is surely a task.
Thank you,

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That's how I see it,

Mark L.

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An inspiring amazing work such as yours deserves an inspiring write up The words just don't do enough for this. The words you used say it all. BRAVO!

Pat

Thank you,

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That's how I see it,

Mark L.

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Could just be a reference I'm not familiar with.
Otherwise, amazing poem mark!
The imagery it put in my head.. was dark and hellish.
The second to last stanza is golden. Well done!

B9 would know a lot more than I BJ. A friend sent a series of paintings to me and they were a great muse. The name Pieter Breugel was among two names that were identified with the series.
Here have a look:
https://www.facebook.com/photo.php?fbid=2057659097603956&set=a.103293013...

So, loving to write from busy paintings I decided to give it a go.
Maybe B9 will come back Hmm... she has a degree in studio art.
Later,

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That's how I see it,

Mark L.

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Bruegel the Elder (1525-1569) and Bosch (1450-1516) have all the ingredients of dark poetry, yet it is somewhat religious. They were both painters from the Netherlands and are compared to artists such as Rembrant (1606-1669) and Vermeer (1632-1675), also Dutch Painters. Their styles could not be more different. I'm surprised there isn't more work like Bruegel and Bosch out there,Which direction the world seems to be going in. Mark made us think about what's happening in the world today. With all the violence and, state of the world in general. Take a look at this Hell, do you want that to be our world? It's time to change like Pieter Bruegel the Elder did and go back to a more sane and wonderful planet.
B9Pat

I came dam near close to breaking the editing feature once again.
I had it slowed down almost to a stand still.
Gotta hand it to the brilliance of Andrew for that feature to withstand my working with it.

Deciding upon what form to go with was the worst part. Free Form just was not working although holding the meter only may be considered Free Form Hmm...not sure about that
Later,

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That's how I see it,

Mark L.

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Fine Art by Pieter Bruegel the Elder (Pieter Bruegel the Elder - Flemish Painter, 1525/1530–1569)

I found the source collection.

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That's how I see it,

Mark L.

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"Raven sits on an empty nest", "everything in bile shades of green", "skeletal make of humankind". The language is certainly painterly and grim, though has a different magic that only words, not images, can get across. Enjoyed this read and wish that the link to the paintings on fb still worked. Thanks for sharing!

Would you prefer a link to the painting or to soundcloud with the painting there? I needed to make up my mind and thought if someone asked I would provide. I really can't put both links in as it would be more like clutter.

Let me know OK,

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That's how I see it,

Mark L.

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