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"PERFUME"
On the clean night air
blowing through my open doors
the whiff of sewer
Style / type:
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
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Comments
Scatterhatter
Wed, 2017-05-31 06:46
Close the doors
Close the doors
Plant daphne
Next season the fragrance
Will be sweet
Scatterhatter
Wed, 2017-05-31 06:46
Close the doors
Close the doors
Plant daphne
Next season the fragrance
Will be sweet
Scatterhatter
Wed, 2017-05-31 06:51
Close the doors
Close the doors
Plant daphne
Next season the fragrance
Will be sweet
Scatterhatter
Wed, 2017-05-31 07:05
Whoops I'm not sure why that
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scribbler
Wed, 2017-05-31 10:21
LOL
I just figured you were wanting me to close the door before you smelled it too lol.....stan
author commentlovedly
Wed, 2017-05-31 08:23
to compare fragrance.. scribbler's version is like endurance
whiff of sewer.......lovely
In the East it's free
all savour it
and
don't know
it's that bad
is it?
endure ...whiff of sewer..................
then smell and enjoy
fragrances of
roses
lilies
lotus
and
jasmine for sure
you will only then know
what stinks much more
ask the
Mayors
to come forth
not to live all the time indoors
sewers need them more
smell mor
what
whiff of sewer
of course
scribbler
Wed, 2017-05-31 10:23
hi loved
I just figure everybody would be expecting me to say something pleasant so I killed 2 birds. I gave the twist which Haiku needs plus a bit of humor. Thanks for the visit.......stan
author commentlovedly
Wed, 2017-05-31 10:31
high kay
okai