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A Penny Dreadful

Submitted by brittle light on Tue, 2012-07-10 23:48

shadows
and more shadows
angles of rain
of course
the night
lonely
distant
voiceless night

sad jazz spreads
a soothing, cool salve
over an open wound
bullet?
Knife?
shattered heart?
all hurt the same
shame
she got so close

I'll live

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Editing - rough draft

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Roscoe Lane

Wed, 2012-07-11 01:34

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As i read this i sort of felt i went back in time, loved the experience. Great poem. Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

brittle light

Wed, 2012-07-18 00:44

brittle light's picture

If you enjoyed the time trip, I have succeeded.
I like the style of of the noir / crime writers of the past. Crisp, sardonic, and understated.
thought I'd give it a try myself. I too, enjoyed it

thank you for ALL the times you have commented.
I really do appreciate you thoughts.

thanks

Al

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