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Peach Poem Recipe November Contest

I envy the prolific poet
who can whip up a delicious dish
of twenty lines (or less)
and present it
like a perfect peach pie;
warm, topped with ice cream.

Words woven in an intricate lattice;
buttery, they melt on my tongue;
taste buds tantalized by the
succulent, brown-sugared mound
of fresh fruit imagery, juicy
and lovingly intermingled

with spicy consonance & assonance;
the phrases sliced at a slant,
until my senses succumb to the glory
of its peachy perfection.
I savor a sliver, let it slip slowly down;
ask for seconds.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

I went from not caring at all about having something to eat; [I just had breakfast a while ago]; to wanting a piece of that delicious peach pie that you have described! Nice work! ~ Geezer.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

But all you younger poets
don't read oldies
all know it g

eneration's weave

Careful now!
We may have to put you on a diet.

Obi.

Wonderful write denalisa! I'm going to look for another slice of your work!

Cheers

Michael Anthony

Very nice, left me with a strong feeling about the envied poet’s work. A really nice tribute to the poet whos work is compared to a tasty pie…

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