yea – I guess
it’s not that powerful though, not even with the pleasant ‘fart about’ surprise…
I dunno, it doesn’t say much about truth lol
never mind jess – it all goes away eventually…

'I wish I was a catholic' – do you need the ‘a’?
love judy
xxx

You have named the reasons for not, is the any excuse for, for, now I am not sure but if there is no after life, do you really think that I am going to be worried at that time lol.
You take care the Universal Energy doesn't Smote You,
Yours with universal love Ian.T

PS:- I think that this poem is too mild and made me smile instead of quake La La

as this is the way of their ways
confession and repentance

I like your wheel and eastern reference
at the end of this work I like the
flow of the "Truth"
and "booth"

"emerge bright and resplendant
with sharpened tooth"

I dont know I just knew the shit of some
of the churchs two abuse situations
and the priests just got sent elsewhere
they do have power those places

sharpened tooth for me because people
just come out and keep re sinning anyway
and lets face it the catholic church has
more then a share of issues right now
that are no longer hidden

But I wanted that part of the poem to rymne

I will think and be and chose
I like that line
very powerful and personal
its like an Oath to be

a coat of arms

I have ORGAMI painted on my jacket
with aircraft My own "Colours"
Ataya wanted me to put that on my jacket
and I dont have a saying yet
to go with it but am working on it

I like this poem a nice length
length Pathos/ deception and reception

awesome
good Title too!

freestyle with stanzas having no consistency of lines
Is it Jess refine?

The hard core belief of the existence of unknown,
POWERS that Be
is beyond me
But all I do know and always profess
there is no life after this
I must confess.
Had there been no computer,
I'd be chary and scary to say
what I just did.

But religion is a must,
to keep distraught minds in a mode of collective bliss
and then poetic views arise as this.
The world is a place for damning conscience
and belief,
but only meditation and self evaluation,
is all in what I myself profess and believe.

But then let that be me.
Still reflexive unable to retrieve

yes, I like the edit, it is a much stronger write now

‘I do not need a handy booth
to emerge bright and resplendent,
free of comforting illusions.’
- do you think ‘freed within comforting illusion’ more it?

also you have used the word ‘illusion’ in the Buddhist stanza as well as here – did you want the repeat?
love judy
xxx

it depends if you want the rhyme and the symbolism

i prefer the sound of
'what a load of fucking crap.
I simply will not stand for that,
keep your lies and hidden truth
I do not need a handy booth
to emerge
freed of comforting delusions.

- it breaks the rhyme and rhythm in an appropriate place..

however, the concept of 'with sharpened tooth' is a good one to include

your call
xxxx

By being late I've apparently missed the shot for easy suggestions lol. For some reason I want to see a few lines about how wasteful reincarnation is/would be without having memory of past lives. You also must have thrown "fucking" in just for the hell of it as imho it adds little to the poem.
But although I disagree with you about the total lack of worth in all religions, I still think this is a well written declaration of emancipation from religions which overly control their adherents' lives................stan OOPS! almost forgot to mention the way the limited structure added to the readability

Im a little confused,
is the point of it to say "you will sin" without respecting faith, or "religious accusers" ?
dont think the "f " word helped me much,

An unfortunate truth. I still live the fear no matter what my reason tells me.

.This inspired CANTICLES AND CANDLES.