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PASSING THROUGH

Submitted by Geremia on Wed, 2016-01-20 14:41

PASSING THROUGH
My words are painful
in the making
and I have so much to tell
but Time is waiting
and my soul writhes
to my private hell
indifferent to this world
and fearful of the next;
it hides in silent places
and speaks to me no more.
and in the quiet of this loneliness,
I wonder
abandoned and betrayed
was it all worthwhile

Last few words: 
AGAINST MY WILL and for this awful weakness that induces feelings of death [typical to PD] I AM STILL ALIVE AND SO IS MY BRAIN.This exhausted the shit out of me.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Esker

Wed, 2016-01-20 18:51

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read books on everest...beyond hillary
sir that is
shackelton and the voyages south
scott with his little diary
those left adrift

was having my own bad day
brought about by lifes choices..
I had to put this little eyebrow ball
in the ring of my babe
hands were like tremor ridden
nerves etc
coming up or going down
either way
it had too be done
just stuck it out
stubborn to the end

and got it

but there is the inevitable when
"it" will get U
and not many write of it
scott did
the chap stuck up on everest
as he slowly froze too death
asking for "sherpa" tea
not the only one a large pile
of them got lost in a storm
most perished

amazing though
spoke with truck drivers
in the west
a steep suicidal grade
they listened as a truck driver
a young fellow kept his mike open
and went off the highway screaming
all the way...
death sometimes is not inoble
although often it makes you immobile

still alive!!!!

best post poem line in
your tour to the beyond
I read and I hear U

and your poems carry worth
too me

thank U Joe!

scribbler

Wed, 2016-01-20 19:44

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As hard as it has and may become, a writer writes. And this is written well.......stan

lovedly

Wed, 2016-01-20 21:17

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why next?
Ask Hilary on Everest
he couldn't get a cup free
hot or cold may be...

you are at least relishing poetry
as we all sing praises of thee
hear us hear
no where else
you shall ever find folks
of Lovedly's kind
all you will leave far behind....
for if you do just sms me
I shall fly towards you
catch me
LDC

Buddha

Wed, 2016-01-20 22:05

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We are between worlds and it is difficult at times to understand this world that we are traveling through on to the next. The journey is far more interesting than the destination. Well penned

lovedly

Wed, 2016-01-20 23:31

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ask Ian ENDS HERE
TILL U JOURNEY STAY BRIGHT
none will receive you
when from the sojourn you alone ALIGHT!

Sparrow

Fri, 2016-01-22 04:12

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Is this a dream festooned with visions of pain,
Or is this pain festooned in the quiet of dreams.
Are we in our own ways real, what of reality
It may be that space between life and death
There in the blink of an eye is eternity's grasp.
If you don't know of what is to happen, then why fear?.
Is our purpose to make mankind a lasting thing
Or is it to teach us about all physical things
Either way that we can endure this part is good
As to the next part, only you know how you did.
There are no cheats, no lies just truth out there..
Go well young Joe and know yourself,
A goodly write..
Yours, Ian, as always..

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