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Parties & parties ( Sunku Workshop )

Fireworks
Chocolate cakes
Party is on

Bullets
Guns and missles
Party is on

More blood
Death toll's up
Party is on

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Sorry if I'm becoming more pessimistic. Crimes against the humanity in Syria is beyond what anyone would imagine
Editing stage: 

Comments

A good Sunku which is in the context of the present scenario in our world.....no matter what's morally right or wrong...there are winners and loser in the game of life ,,,and life goes on...

raj (sublime_ocean)

V. much appreciate the read and your kind words.

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Such an accurate depiction of what is going on in the world today. You could try eliminating THE and just say party's on. Otherwise, great Sunku

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

For your time. Edits done. Appreciate it.

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coming from you Rula
would be like a paucity
of syllables form

Can I request you to your SUNKU reform
Iriz has take us all up
like a storm

Thank you sir for the visit. Hope it flows better now.
Appreciate it.

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Well done
I love your angry message
It is not only about current events.
To me your sunku is
about how life finds a way to ignore pain when it is not a direct hit and
how inactivity and ignorance makes it worse

IRiz

dear. You've read between the lines which few can do.
So grateful for your consistant effort, you have fulfilled all that a workshop might need.
Highly appreciate it dear.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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cheers,
Jess
Neopoet is a workshop. Poets take the time to read and think about your work and offer suggestions.
There is no obligation to make any changes however please acknowledge critique and comments.

Thanks for honoring me with your read.
I wonder what makes you think that it's not a sunku though.
Thank you.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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