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Paradise Dissected

full color posters span the room.
exotic islands extending
a promise of paradise


whispy fronds
sandy waves
golden umbrellas of sun
and moonlight
the waters,
and wine, sparkling
with an infectious splashing jubilance

reclaimed colonial remnents,
spruced and gussied,
are re-animated on slick penny posts
dosed with salcious slogans,
and taunting, boastful

charming enticements,
sanitized in white,
safe for all consuming pleasures

but, on the lee,
dark left-overs

the other


the promise,
long gone

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I am so surprised no one has commented on this one yet I really loved it, I like how you see the underbelly of life, you see the beauty but you also see what lays beneath.. and you put it so well into words

another wonderful poem its always a pleasure

love JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

...and it is always a pleasure to hear from you!

poetry, even light , or silly verse, needs to be layered...somewhat, or it will be as bland as unsalted soup!

thanks again


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