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PALOR

Submitted by Geremia on Fri, 2016-11-18 11:20

PALOR
there is no going back ;
there is only rushing forward
I look behind and see beyond horizons
worn by Time’s passing tears,
now filled with shadows who
shared a lifetime…..
colorless specters in refraction,

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Editing - rough draft

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alidzain

Fri, 2016-11-18 15:33

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this is simply wonderful

Alid

jane210660

Sat, 2016-11-19 06:05

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This is beautiful Joe. Jx

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judyanne

Sat, 2016-11-19 06:38

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I have no words Joe...
one tiny crit... do you need the word 'beyond'?
Bookmarked.
I intend to memorise this.
Love Judy
xxx

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Candlewitch

Sat, 2016-11-19 12:14

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wonderful write...leaves me quite breathless :)

*hugs, Cat

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Geremia

Tue, 2016-11-22 13:30

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THANK YOU, ALL

JOE

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