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a palamilo sunset

he hum ye! ha! delinquent spice of paprika
like drains that pour at sea tumbling he! ha!
gulping down in the sea; and motet an opal
wash with the bay, moult plum skin birds
they of an everlast that recedes angels feathers
dressed also to weather every writhe azalea's lea
and doth bid wear, motley on the mount
as a pique mockingbird of court jesters
in an ovule of oviparous years to reach,
nymph and nozzle, metier of artisan
tidily, the fetters of green nature
rebound from rebuff as a living excrement
that gels of the battle weary, in forefronts

this one should be rocked in a cradle
if in war torn settlements, war songs lullaby
to live a panjandrum in rabid Colosseum
fighting for the dogs, with the lowly few
in an arena of freight from a gladiator
hoping to see just one more sun scotch, not beheaded
one more thoughtless thread , no child prattle
so to sit scurrilous as Pegasus did
metallurgy of the femur, the hip and sockets compost
teetotaler doth bid gleam tawdry spasmodically
sheaves shear, and quilt from odd stitching shankers
somnolent sophistry, officious off-white
the drapers thrill thong scree on mountainside
scrawl like scoff scour of debris on detritus
the fire in the heart is out!

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Yet again, this is awash with imagery, but even the title gives me no real clue what it is about.... what is a ?palamino.

Love judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

a palamilo is a horse

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Again I very much your words and writing style
like...maketh in my mind imagery sound
but then Im the kind of person who gets to the rivers
raging edge and sea surf stone
before falling in!

how best to see
but the front lines!

I sense a more of a drawn back and slower pace
to the power in this
and somehow I can see more
like a drive on a street
then the frentic weave of a taxi
harried as before

Shall re read others
comment as I make my way
next few days

thank U !

Loved the write so much info sometimes the word force clogs the read but is worth the trouble to read a few times.
The title are you sure it is "Palamilo" as I can't find it, are you talking about the colour "Palomino" usually describing the colours of a horse.
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thats it, i meant about the horse and its weird conveyance of carriage to the befallen human tumbled at sea

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And makes that last line very poignant

I suggest you correct the spelling of the title
love judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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