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Paint me red

Paint me red

I paint a light
when tis darkness and others can't see
Fluorescence paint is needed for me
to ensure they can see
my silhouette
out in the darkness
a vision of the only one
of a kind of me

your own take friend
that's me.....
now there is no more glee
no light for me
this is what I in your poetry see
won’t call it blasphemy
as distance alone
lends beauty to a scene

we have once good friends been...
haven’t we?

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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One of your gems. No whining for attention, an exemplar of alienation.
In short,
a gem.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Directors

u say I am no poet---------------------------------
some ones gave me a
BRONZE
for this.... u also call a gem thanks

i write once in a while
as earthquakes aren't too often
regards
medicine and meditation are ur panacea j\friend

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I can't apologise enough.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Directors

bows...................

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and I like the idea of "Fluorescence paint"
You shine beloved without the flurenscene paint. You do with your unique style.
welcome back.

❤❤❤❤❤❤

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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they gave me a
BRONZE
for this in some competition
stay blessed

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love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

Great write. I fully agree with the other critiques.

be well,

joe

Glad you liked it Judy

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this is natural, i loved the way it was composed

kindness again
two poems u glanced today
come again my way

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