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Our fair share

We all have our own minds
we all have our own slices
we all live
but together …
we can't live alone
can we?

we must value the other
money is just only paper
you can burn and get a burning flavor
but then guilt is your entire share ….
leave it or take it,
if you care …

life's shadows are different
from each angle …
your eyes in the night stare
at the darkness
some stare like holy madness
their day is darker
still time is what they can't kill
steal they still as ever will…..

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I love looking at a clear night sky - but iit's even better if we can be share it with someone we love.

Having and holding each other is special, more valuable than money. There is always depth to your poems - and little gems of light!

Thank you for your wisdom!

LOve Mand xxxx

how I wish others could see!
all those who are blind!


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Your light has blinded me
But it is only my eyes that cannot see
The thoughts that are flowing free
Are all that are needed for you to be

Have a lovely new day out there,
yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

you razzle dazzle me


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"Our fair share" Loved?
Like how you've taken that turn of phrase and put it on it's head! Clever thinking I deed!
Just one slight alteration I would perhaps look at IMO. The last line...
"Steal they shall?" is that what you're trying to convey? Not clear to this befuddled brain of mine... ;)


old habits die hard or rarely
so they still continue to...
can't be helped by anyone


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