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Or Happier At Least

I was happy,
TV nightly,
As a family,
Simple pleasures,
‘Any Umbrellas?’
Family holidays,
I was happy,
Perhaps the world was happy,
Or happier at least.

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Not Explicit Content

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A somber feeling here, I guess this reminds me of watching
(play your cards right) on a Friday night, and a caravan holiday in kent Happier or at least as happy as we can be (could have been) Carl, I had 6 Sibblings, that might explain a bit of my world, and why I understand your stuff. I was really in a world of.my own and eventually left home at the grand age of 18! I like this freeze frame moment of yours

Thank you...Teddy

I like your responses to my verse a lot. I was in a world of my own too. I'm glad you like it, I am trying to whittle my verses down to the best ones, and will sideline not a few. But might keep this little vignette. Carl.

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With today's technology I think you can keep all your writes on at least on a key? It's amazing when looking back at the stuff I wrote just 10 years ago and I actually spruce it up sometimes.

Thank you...Teddy

There is a file for them, but they will not be part of the 'first team' as it were, and yes it is possible to spruce up your old writings. Bye for now. Carl.

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This seems to me like the beginning of a poem lol. Leaves me wondering what changed to make the past seem so much better. Perhaps that was your intent?

I see what you mean, it is a bit sparse, and I am thinking it might be better to either build on it, or sideline it. What changed? I guess I was looking back at the unity of family life when I was younger, and the carefree nature of those days. Carl.

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