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Open Your Eyes

Open your eyes, my friends
We have been fed with lies for many years
This deception must come to an end
or it will ravage our dreams for the future

We have been nodding our heads,
machinations serving the corrupt without intent,
puppets to the minds deprived of humanity,
allowing them to stir our lives to ruins

Open your eyes and rise
let your voice be heard,
In silence our souls have died,
let them be reborn in this life

We will no longer be enslaved by liars
who refuse to acknowledge their faults,
hiding them behind the veil of words
while their hands do nothing to correct

Open your eyes and make a stand
Let the false kings' reign reach its end

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when we are spineless

you asked me once to compose
a poem
this is it now

when we are spineless
place on a higher pedestal
others without spines
maybe weaker than thine

in places of power
let them devour the roost

why call them spineless
I ask of you

You placed them there in the first place
now why curse them do you

We alone are responsible
for a spineless generation
entwined in women and wine
say look after us oh helpless Divine
where can you in a devastating world like this ever shine
erect your spine

then say I 'm alone but fine!


no truer words have been spoken.


author comment

now you add on


we cannot change the past
mistakes that we have made
which allow the liars rise to power
but we can and we must strive
for the good of the future
silence will not save us
if we do nothing,
its as bad as consenting to their deeds
we must speak up or all will be lost


author comment

One can sense the uneasiness within which inspired this's a good thing to generate awareness about these issues...


raj (sublime_ocean)

thanks for stopping by. Appreciate it very much.


author comment

A write that is so true. there will one day be a king that will reign in righteousness. but for now we endure this corrupt system that will end one day.

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Neopoet Community

I just hope that it come sooner. got sick o the things that have been happening nowadays.


author comment

Yes man is ever gullible to his own illusions,
living in a concocted world of false premises.

Hi from Ann.

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

Everyone can see what is wrong. Try analysing why it is wrong and offering solutions.

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