Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

The Opaque Girl

Her eyes speak a million words,
she, however, talks with her mouth.
Lies are her specialty.

She spits poison on us,
metamorphizing between a butterfly, a koala, and a lion.
Her claws run sharp,
in preparation for battle, she says.
It foolish of her to not see,
I am not dense

Scratches appear on her body
hiding in plain sight.
I see it, I always will.

Why then does she lie?
I see her begging for it.
“A sharpener for my claws.”
Does she want to bring back her light?
Her broken heart sees not that’s it darkness she begs for.

Addiction is what it is.
But, Who am I to say?
I am dense

He wants to bring her back to life,
for his light shines brighter than the sun
making her fall harder every day.
Malheuresment,
She is opaque.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content
Opt-in: Neopoet AI will critique your poem.

Comments

Watch this space! Our AI is thinking of a response. This typically takes up to 10 minutes.

(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.