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Onward Zionist Soldiers! (Part Two)

IV
Onward, Zionist soldiers,
marching as to war,
With the star of David
going on before!

See Netanyahu’s armies
paid for by yankee gold
Killing women and kiddies
doing as they’re told.

REFRAIN:
Onward Zionist soldiers
longing for a war
With the Star of David
drenched in Gazan gore!

V
Onward Zionist settlers
stealing Palestinian lands
With the deaths of thousands
on your greedy hands!

Building flats and houses
on the western banks
Protected by armed soldiers
and US-sponsored tanks.

REFRAIN:
Onward the thieves of Zion
who bomb and maim and kill!
O whence comes a saviour
to slaughter them at will?

VI
Palestinian children
throw a few small stones;
Brave Israeli weapons
crush their feeble bones.

Here comes Netanyahu
spouting a load of crap;
Where’s a Muslim hero
to wipe him off the map?

REFRAIN:
Onward Zionist soldiers
bringing death and doom;
One day someone, somehow,
Will send you to your tomb.

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
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Last few words: 
After the enthusiastic reception which the first instalment received from people, I have been encouraged to pen another three verses and choruses. Remember to sing it to the tune of "Onward Christian Soldiers" (music: Sullivan of Gilbert & Sullivan). Here's a link to Part One in case you missed it: https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/poems/onward-zionist-soldiers-part-one (if the link won't work, just copy and paste it) - ES 5.1.2020
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Comments

Unfortunately, a little too close to the truth for most folk.
A sickening state of affairs,
The tail that wags the dog!
Israel and the USA.

Obi.

...for your intelligent comment!

Maybe not "most" folk; just "some" folk.

xxx
Edna
Poet(ess) to the Stars

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