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Only a dream

Submitted by loved on Mon, 2014-03-24 08:22

When I dream of two cocks fighting,
I seem to imagine two poets
dribbling with a voluminous load of words,
trying to sort out
who amongst them will come first ….
I dream of a day when they all queue up
for a Nobel
but somehow I am ushered in... My best critiques yell.... hold it, tis unfair
he doesn’t know a dime of poetry
we dive into deep seas
in search of oysters with diamonds,
not pearls,
metaphor is all the more
the sign of a poet
a simile for a smile, maybe
and then my dream bursts like a volcano
they all pick me up and say
happy day,
this boy goes out today
with the bathtub so to say,
my eyes open in stark nudity
crazy dream twas
did you witness it
Oh! How I wish!

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Esker

Tue, 2014-03-25 23:37

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poe wrote of nevermore..
cobain sang of it...

your writing..this poem
is relaxed more real
in its surreal
diamonds not pearls
simile for smiles..

i like this kind of poetry
but i know its not for everyone
how free verse is tougher
deeper waters

further from the safety of shore
the little verses like waves
enjoyable
not the big breakers
thrashing on the
jagged coral
the heavy stones
worn smooth

cock fight
i like that compare
an underworld
where money
is its root
of evils

everyone has a favourite
winner or loser

for me this poem is a winner
love

thank you!

loved

Wed, 2014-03-26 05:55

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the GOLDSMITH
who knows
not only all about gold
but the 4 C'S of diamonds

I feel elated
as you read this simple no norm poetry
That's what I call creativity
Else no more Shakespeares' will ever be born
and
no one would like it
would you ....

loved

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Esker

Fri, 2014-04-04 08:39

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for ther argon in them..purity.

loved

Fri, 2014-04-04 14:35

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thereby>???

loved

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Esker

Wed, 2014-04-09 10:35

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through history the purity of things requires much labour and cost..
or origin as in argon in blue diamonds for the color..the blue..

i like poetry although my words are raw compared to some..
there is something about raw and existing that is beautiful

loved

Wed, 2014-04-09 13:46

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Raw apples
raw mangoes
raw gals and
raw guys
and
really raw virginuos
Y O U T H

loved

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loved

Sun, 2014-05-04 03:28

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between a poet and learner
Esker and
Loved
no one else has read it the stream flows faster than its swimmerrs

loved

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Ian.T

Sun, 2014-05-04 11:04

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I liked it, but have I read this before ???
It seemed to irritate my memory and you shouldn't do that to an old Guy like me.
It's bad enough trying to remember yesterday.
Take care young one talk later, Yours Ian.T

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Sun, 2014-05-04 13:08

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meant for permanent dreamers
Ian you are excluded
just for fun
as u have read all
one by one

loved

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