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ONE'S UNREQUITED LOVE
You remind me
of the smiles
the good mornings
love
the lip smacking
the noses rubbing
you remind me
of the tongues in cheeks
kisses by the tons
but that was long ago
now the mornings are dull
curtains pulled
no sun
son none
no darling
no smiles
no kisses
none
she says
hey make some coffee
and
I do
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Fri, 2021-03-19 08:21
The longing...
of emotional comfort! Rekindling the fires is not easy for some people. Maybe, you should insist on your allotment of kisses, put your longing in them and hold her gently. I ask for and get my kisses everyday. I put my arms around her and hug gently, but with insistence. Look into her eyes and say; " I love you!" My wife sometimes seems annoyed when I insist on these things, and I will back off until she is not busy and has no excuse, then I approach her again. I know that she is secretly amused and pleased. A dance of seduction throughout the day. Try it, she'll like it! I love your poem, it shows a very honest
emotion and need. Not a thing to crit.! One of your best. Now, write again, when you have succeeded in your quest! ~ Geez.
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lovedly
Fri, 2021-03-19 11:47
the longing the desires
thanks for sharing Geez
I shall also convey to those who need it
What ..
kisses
my best one thanks
whenever one is in deprivation and tears flow
so do words from lovedly blow
the wind is in the right direction
and friction is in prime position
lol
Geez
lovedly
Fri, 2021-03-19 12:44
tnx15
so many r hankering madam
lovedly
Sat, 2021-03-20 11:00
O Mark
I am always in BLUE
call me whenever wish you
but I am a rose red
not yet dead
YOU are always welcome
whenever where ever
just give a tinkle
all will be done
but seldom
remember me that night
was ur first fight
your right
o what a sad delight
now be morer polite
MARK
you are
quite a...Spark
lol
make up
thanks
~~~~~~
lovedly
Mon, 2021-12-20 12:01
TO MAKE AMENDS
IS DIFFICULT
ANY SUGGESTIONS
NEO'S POETS
Geezer
Mon, 2021-12-20 12:16
Continue to...
to be the same lovely person that you've always been. Be kind and speak less of oneself. Make kind suggestions without being critical of the same mistakes that ride with you.
~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
lovedly
Mon, 2021-12-20 12:27
I am now more of a living corpse
in Q purchasing my last ticket
here also I fall
short
a life gone unsung
only u have once in a way sung
dear Gee