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The One Handed Typist(Critique Workshop)

oh the shades of blues
the blacks are quite an accent
I await the hues oh yellows and greens
with excited anticipation

twice the size it used to be
it looks like stay puffs hand
with layers upon layers of gauze
and bands
single keys each one I press
none of this is meant to impress
only that I do better typing one finger then ten
so now I come to sudden end

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welcome back from the hospital. I see, you still have your sense of humor, which is good. Keep on typing as well as you can; maybe use your toes? Wishing you the best, Dear,
Jerry

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thank

i will try

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our star pupil in the workshop, is a fantastic study. [Not to mention a fan of mine] LoL. I am impressed with her critique and wish that she could be accompanied by the rest of the people that signed up for the workshop. You are right about your typing, you do much better with your one hand than with two. Maybe now the other one will help instead of getting in the way?
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tks Yes I Am quite pleased with the way she progressed
lol

tks yes I am pleased with her progress I'm Not back full steam not until I can take the mountain of bandages off (Tuesday) then it is just one big bandaid on the heel of my hand

i'm try

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i will come tomorrow to make my official review, but i just wanted to ask with one hand, how long did this take to write?

(giggles)

Thank you...Teddy

lol
about 15 minutes

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Dear lynn, so glad you're back from the hospital and typing such good poems with one finger.
I understand that the bandages will come off soon. Hope you're not in pain? I'll return to this one and hope I'll have time to visit your workshop.
Get well soon, Gracy

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oh the shades of blues
the blacks are quite an accent
I await the hues oh yellows and greens----instead of oh, should it be of?
with excited anticipation

twice the size it used to be
it looks like stay puffs hand
with layers upon layers of gauze
and bands----here i would make a space so you have 3 clear stanza's

single keys each one I press
none of this is meant to impress----is may not be nessasary here?
only that I do better typing one finger then ten--- than---rather that then?
so now I come to sudden end----- i like your abrubtness its a clever play.

I think this is a really fun write, it's funny writing with one hand, i have written this review as you have written your poem. my arm is now aching. and it took 45 minutes.

Thank you...Teddy

you are just too cute lol tks i just threw this one together for the ws and the fun of it

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