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ONE CATCH (spreading wings shop)

One more stroke
of cypress paddle,
that my dad made,
in crystal waters
of a calm lake.

And this old jon boat
glides forward a bit
leaving hardly a ripple behind;
then coasts to a stop.

My nine foot fly rod
of split bamboo
whips gracefully
as a magician's wand
with just a whhiiiiissp
of line through guides.

A minuscule pause
while line straightens out
behind me..
then with a wrist flip
I power the line forward.

It drops with its passenger,
a foam body spider,
exactly where I want
right next to a shallow stump.
where I let it lie...and lie
until all is still..

Then with trees reflecting
off mercurial water
I move the fly the slightest bit
-------
The peace ENDS
as a bass explodes
sending water spraying
as it jumps shaking its head

A short fight
then supper is subdued
and line is checked for frays.

then

One more stroke.............

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Free verse
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Comments

was that fish? Was it thiiisssss big? LoL
I can see me on that lake, paddling that johnny-boat, toward that old log, wondering if there is supper waiting for it's supper.
I know for the sake of keeping the workshop moving, that we have to keep the poems brief, but I would loved to have kept going to the fry-pan and the smell of butter and fish, the taste of it and the relaxing feeling of an ice-cold beer on the back porch. But hey, you got me thinking it, soooo... Nice stuff! ~Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Leuciscvs cephalns.

It bends for thee
sweet, Chevin.
this cane thats
cleaved by three,

wilt thou now
sweet, Chevin.
yield, and bend, for me.

----------------------------
I see your, Bass.
And raise you a, Carp.

Obi.

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