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FOR ONCE, TO SEE
I've sped this interstate before
with horses racing 'neath the hood
while thoughts of work pecked at my core;
no attention spared for field or wood.
But this afternoon the snow flakes swarm
clearing most traffic from my route.
I switch heater to hot from warm
attempting to keep the chill out.
Then suddenly I'm forced to slow
by a wave of sudden thick whiteout
and as I gradually cease to go
I take time to think and look about.
Dense deep woods crowd from either side
cloaked in a shroud of purest white
which blowing snow's trying to hide
and likely will before the night.
In a near blink the snow is past
and all is clearly on display,
all this beauty I've too often passed
while speeding on my merry way.
I'd rather stay but have to go
for there's much to do before day's done
so I start my truck in twilight's glow.
Tasks and time await no one.
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Comments
gregwa8
Fri, 2018-06-08 01:05
nice poem. a stop in snowy
nice poem. a stop in snowy woods by frost comes to mind. :)
scribbler
Fri, 2018-06-08 10:05
good
It is an updated attempt at that same poem lol
author commenttyro
Fri, 2018-06-08 10:13
this has the same colloquial
this has the same colloquial feel as poems by Frost
I think you did a wonderful job at the update.
and by the way, the title is spot on.
"while thoughts of work pecked at my core;
no attention spared for field or wood." now isn't this just a true sign of modern life
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
scribbler
Fri, 2018-06-08 16:00
Hi tyro
This is the first time I've intentionally tried to write an updated version of an old master's poems so I'm pleased that you say I managed to maintain the original "feel" . Appreciate the visit.......stan
author commentraj
Fri, 2018-06-08 16:32
Hi Stan
this poem is yet another example of creating the mood and images by someone who eats, breathes, sleeps and dreams in rhyme...your craft is one of its kind...FOR ONE'S LIKE ME TO SEE
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raj (sublime_ocean)
scribbler
Sat, 2018-06-09 15:06
Hi raj
I don't rhyme all the time . I'm just a bumbler as a poet and I know it. LOL. Thanks for dropping by
author commentraj
Sat, 2018-06-09 15:28
Stan
if i may venture I would ask Susan if she would at times like free verse because it's said variety is the spice of life...know what i mean? .:)
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raj (sublime_ocean)
scribbler
Sat, 2018-06-09 23:40
Hmmm......
It HAS been a while since I posted a free verse hasn't it? And you are also right about poetry lol
author commentIRiz
Sun, 2018-06-10 13:54
Thank you for taking me to
Thank you for taking me to the world of snow and twilight it feels good for a change. Our summer kicked in with so much greenery that it is dark in my house. It is TWIGlight !!!
IRiz
scribbler
Sun, 2018-06-10 18:26
Hi Riz
90 degrees here today. I wish for a bit of snow also lol. I know what you mean by the leaves at least blocking some sun from my home. I have 3 hundred year old oaks shielding me. Thanks for coming by....stan
author commentIRiz
Sun, 2018-06-10 19:02
My pleasure!
My pleasure!
IRiz
lovedly
Sun, 2018-06-10 14:02
u update @ any rate
but for Neo's clause
even Shakespeare loves
applause
why then u and i pause !
scribbler
Sun, 2018-06-10 18:27
OK, OK
Don't nag!. I'll comment on at least one of yours tonite......stan
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