The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Older" by Kelly Ann Wilson is a heart-wrenching tribute to a loved one who has passed away. The poem is a reflection on the things the speaker wished they could have seen their loved one experience as they grew older. The poem is written in free verse and is broken up into several stanzas, each focusing on a different moment the speaker wanted to witness.

The poem is emotionally charged, and the use of vivid imagery helps to create a strong sense of nostalgia. The speaker's desire to see their loved one achieve milestones in life, such as earning a letter on their hockey sweater, getting their driver's license, and graduating from college, is palpable. The poem is also infused with a sense of regret, as the speaker laments the fact that they will never get to witness these moments.

One suggested line edit would be to change the line "I wanted to hold your son" to "I wanted to hold your child." This change would make the line more gender-neutral and inclusive, allowing the speaker to express their desire to hold the child of their loved one, regardless of their gender.

Overall, "Older" is a beautiful and poignant poem that captures the fleeting nature of life and the importance of cherishing the time we have with the people we love. The poem is a testament to the power of memory and the enduring impact that our loved ones can have on our lives.

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a very heartfelt poem that details the things that an aunt was afraid she might not see or experience with her nephew, because she thought that she would not be around because of her health issues. The AI has only the poem itself to work with
and doesn't read the last comments, so, made an error in judgement about the purpose of the poem. A very good impression
and one that anyone might have, without the full story. I am always careful to read the last comments and so don't often make that mistake. Of course, I do get it wrong occasionally. Other than seeing way too many [ands], I loved the piece and didn't see anything else I would change. I think that you could remove many of the [ands] by changing a few endings of words, playing with the structure of the lines, and that sort of thing. I don't believe that the changing of the line that says:
"I wanted to hold your son" to the ambiguous 'child' is necessary. Many parents and relatives 'wish' for a child of either gender according to the activities they see themselves doing with that child. All-in-all, a great poem, that can be made just a little greater. ~ Geezer.
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I understand this is special to you. I read it and studied it and have formed an opinion no matter.
I would not have published the following:
*Content Warning*
Death and dying

Older
Written by Kelly Ann Wilson

Nor would I have done this:
Written March 29, 2003
© 2023 Kelly Ann Wilson

I would never request this intensity:
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
(I have been here since the day this website opened)

I would have created a way to make this clear in the body or title of the poem:
This poem is based on notes I had written when my health was in critical condition to leave for my nephew.

There is a lot of repetition in your poem. Perhaps create a version without all that repetition, a separate poem and see how it goes over here. This is the place (Neopoet) to do that.

This is not a harsh critique just my opinions for you to take or not.
I read the entire poem and from me that is a compliment :~)
Keep at it,
Max