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I love you both
oh so dearly,
but what about me?
You left me leery.

I just wanted to be on top.
Center stage for just one play.
Then you came, took that away.

Whats it like,
to take control?
To be the star,
be lead role.

My chance is close,
but you're so near.
Now my biggest fear,
is knowing you're in their ear.

All I need,
is the triple threat.
A little success,
not these regrets.

One more year.
That's all I've got.
To make my dream come true,
or be forgot.

Last few words: 
Just another "trying to get over writers block" poem. Using my acting life problems seems like a good fuel to that fire.
Editing stage: 

Comments

Your writing block is being destroyed, reminds me of the "Village of The Damned" when the teacher built a wall to stop the pupils seeing what he was doing, and the pupils taking it to pieces brick by brick.
I must say it is a thing that has avoided my ways, I may have been lost for words at some time but that didn't stop me talking.
A good write and there is a light,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Good poem, but lose that poetic "oh" in the 2nd line - its cheesy - move the question mark from line 9 to line 10, and add the word "to" to the beginning of line 10.

A good exercise for overcoming writer's block:

Pick a household object. Observe it closely, and write down everything that you can about it: what it is, where it comes from, its dimensions, who owns it, what its made of, how it makes you feel. Whatever thoughts come into your head as you write, then write down that thought down next, before continuing with the descriptions. If writing down the random thought gives you another idea or thought, then write THAT down next, and so on. If no more thoughts come, then continue your descriptions of the original object, repeating the process.
Then, take each one of the things you have already written down, and write a paragraph or so detailing how each of those things makes you feel, or makes you think about.
Tedious, but very effective. The best way to overcome a block is to write, constantly, continually, and diligently, no matter what you write about.

Keep writing.

Respectfully, Jim

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