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Okay you lead


You don't say!
Yes I'd deserve one
sitting atop the
but do not panic
many come here to stay
they need to be pushed away
while some came just yesterday
did you see
how some cynic pushed them away

God... whoever he or she may be
resides in the jungles of mind
cobwebs at times
eyes' blind
but have you noticed
as I do everyday
Newspapers say
1923 born are still on their way
yet 2000 born were taken by a flight straight away

in the darkness of an eerie night
just do not sway
none know who will be next
You or I who can
that ever say

not even Stan or Jess or Joe
neither can that can
I or Ian you may go

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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then you will follow
Sir Snowman easily
wrt Ian's remarks

author comment

Now you have found a lengthy way of writing, just to please us all can we have a continuous flow throughout and no drift from the theme.
I am so pleased that you wrote this longish piece and showed us that we may expect a grand poem soon.
You referred Wesley to "Bury me" your previous write which was exceptional, but these poems must stand alone and be able to be read as a separate item, without reference to any other write unless it is mentioned someplce
Yours Ian

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Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

as in P for pee
so is it for P in poetry

at times you take standard 21 seconds
to pee
at times prostate guys
have a longer take
so is it with poetry
that one does make

some times words flow freely
at times they get '''blocked '''
damned if I may say openly
if not mentally
Happy Ian now you ought to be..
lemme see
what that ?
no, no your new poetry

author comment

knows the date when they will go. And few can even guess when others are ready for their final journey. But there Does come a time when a person's accumulation of years makes it clear that they should not make long term plans which include themselves..............stan

let all know
life has to end
WE ALL know!

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