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OH where I live …you can't imagine what it is like to be in heaven

where I live …you can't imagine …what it is like to be in heaven
the wind is free
the sun shines all day and night…
there is no need of a moon
where I live it’s like a fountain of love
all come here to swoon

Oh my friend all that I now can say
come home to heaven soon…

twill be a boon

the frustration and meditation,
the need for salutation …
recognition and the lust of all
that is tuned as sexual
all will be forgotten soon

heaven’s gates will remain open ever
for anyone
but dare not fear
come and enjoy
what you think rebirth shall reward
there is no hurry here …
for any award
no need of recognition
a desire
why hasn't the whole wild world
read my poems entire …

all will end in peaceful glory
life will not be as on earth
tis so gory

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Free verse
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Comments

you know I am an atheist.

You contradict yourself though.

I would delete the entire stanza-

there is no hurry here …
for any award
no need of recognition
a desire
why hasn't the whole wild world
read my poems entire …

cheers,
Jess
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