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When a name is christened
Penciled in on business plan
To excel when challenged
It means a lot to the clan

Walking the path to perfection
Separating odds from the flush
Like a refinery purging pollution
While we take along the brush
Distilled residue of human nature
Office politics, rested on ego
Queried the mode of the venture
Compelled to drag the embargo

Hatred and unrestrained sentiment
Degrading the victim further
Learning made tough and tedious
With nothing left for retirement
Insufficient to drive the lesson
Of toil and of sacrifice for all
Our family name in high spirit
Of committed heritage on the tail

The prized plume thus symbolizes
A good name, not a painted sepulcher
Nor pride of insincerity; devoid of ills
Striving to attain the best, the very best…

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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This has been left by many, I think that each Stanza contained too many words without a flow of reason to capture the reader, this could do with some life in there a person or even a group where the effect of your words or the action causes a raised eyebrow.
There are many people that would love to know what your thoughts are and the way you live in your own lands away from our rat race.
Just think about the things I have said before, History or poetry, tell a story that holds us, Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

This was directed to a few in an establishment where I worked, like you rightly observed, it was not well received, there are so many things said in here, I need to apply some techniques learnt in the just concluded workshop on more meters, best wishes


A rekindled faith - Dancing in the Light

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