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Ode to my Number Two (April Contest)

My dearest number two
I love you very much
In your school house yellow
A dandelion feel

Through my nose and sinus
You return me to class
Second grade aroma
My dearest number two

Bring ideas to a point
Sharp or dull you contrast
My dearest number two
All angles can be seen

If you are ever wrong
My dearest number two
Nibble on your soft end
Then erase to a smear

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the smell of pencils, chewing on erasers. so much relatable in this. I like how you have "my dearest number two" in each stanza. you might want to think of titling it that. nice poem.

That works!

~Mark~

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that works great for the title! [ My Dearest Number Two] An "ode" doesn't always have to be titled "Ode to". It brought back the memories of setting at my desk in grade school, taking a test; even though they are decades old. I have grandchildren in school and in attending different functions, I still have flashbacks of those days, when I see those little desks, the blackboards and the hardwood floors. Great job! ~ Geezer.
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No 1 and No 2
had different meanings
I thought you knew
Never mind
the stalwarts understood you
you can't be a new comer can you

well welcome from all
a lovely ode to you

win your First Contest
happy be you
too

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