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October mess

i overdosed twice since October
its hard enough just to stay sober.

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STOP doing that! You do NOBODY any good in a casket

The bitch had shot up the last of our smack while i was asleep.
Next to me.
Dead.
We had been fucking a few hours before.
That felt weird.

She was clearly very dead so I bolted and called an ambo from a payphone.
It could have been me. Or you.
I presume heroin or some other opiate, most other things are hard to OD on.

Talk to me by PM. I have truly done it all, even died twice. So fucking talk to me.

Whatever pain you are medicating I promise I can find you something safer.

cheers,
Jess
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