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Oblivious

Submitted by tyro on Wed, 2020-06-10 09:54

Anticipation has filled me,
it boils, and it waits release

as my lips begin to tremble,
warmed by heart’s increase.

One touch, my body shudders
in surrender to private bliss,

then soft, moist and loving
I drift oblivious in the kiss

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Editing - rough draft
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Not Explicit Content

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Lavender

Wed, 2020-06-10 17:25

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Hi, tyro,
There you, again. You are quite the romantic. I like the build up and anticipation of the moment that leads to 'drift oblivious in the kiss.' A tender and pure write.
Thank you,
L

tyro

Fri, 2020-06-12 04:00

thank you Lavender for you comment

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The most powerful reaction
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Rula

Thu, 2020-06-11 09:24

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I always believed that to be romantic is one thing, but to express it so well is another thing. What I wanted to say is that you have expressed yourself with words pretty well here. Congrats!!

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tyro

Fri, 2020-06-12 04:09

thank you dear Rula I always appreciated your comments.
Now I hate to bring up something so ugly to you, but I wrote a poem a while ago and have wanted to hear what you think.
Its called WAR.

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The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

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Geezer

Thu, 2020-06-11 09:18

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wouldn't like man to say such romantic things? My wife love it when I say stuff like that! Good job, ~ Geezer.
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tyro

Fri, 2020-06-12 04:10

thank you Geezer

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The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

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tyro

Fri, 2020-06-12 04:11

I like your very funny reply, thank you very much.

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The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

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