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Objection

I object! I object!
This child is too green
to define love
and the lure of sin!

She knows not the diference
between lust and true affection!
Don't let her lose her innocence
to the filthy hands of mortal demons!

Dear God! Let me taste her anger
and the hate from her young heart
that she may thank me later
for never letting her drift apart.

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Structured: Western
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prayer Khalid and a touching theme.

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Alid

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