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O Tree of Many Splendours

O Tree of many splendours
Lady what can you mean?
O'erhung with sacred thunders
A wooded island green

The wind is in your breast
the night is on the air
the ghostly twin of love's caress
is trembling through your hair

O Lovely daughter of the night
within your crescent tower
who cast the word of Shulamite
within your holy bower

A virgin in your arms a'dream
as the prophet poet calls
to mark the hour though serene
when night on Eden falls

O Tree of many splendours
Lady what can you mean?
endowed with cosmic wonders
of amethyst and green

The wind is in your breast belle
your ghost is on the air
a mist between your love and hell
is written in your stare

O Lovely stranger of the west
within your sheltered bower
who placed a faith within my chest
a sweet and deathly flower?

A virgin in your arms a'dream
as the final angels calls
to mark the hour set astream
when night on Eden falls

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No doubt there is more to this than seems at first glance, but I really like the gentle roll of a decidedly
romantic work in the style of the bards of old. Hats off to a very nice piece in rhyme! [No surprise here].
The title is one of the things that attracted my attention, your language use was right in tune and helped with the whole image. It flowed well, having a presence of theme and it came to a logical conclusion. ~ Geezer.
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