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O MY ROSE

All roses now we

But all roses have thorns
it's
not a rose
if has them clipped ere the fall
and
Marriage is not
a bed of roses at all
it takes away all liberties
many fail to use condoms
and beget only kids
poor economy

that is why in West
most live- in
carry kids
both gals and guys
else the hubby flies

Now he is tied down to you
the one time Rose
And with kids
selfies he does also pose
so as to your confidence repose
and continue to say

I love you my dearest Rose
I have now froze
Would you warm up
O lovely rose...
when can we to each other
now finally propose

Kids are two
one three
and
the other two ...

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the lines about: That is why in West
most live-in
carry kids
both gals and guys
else the hubby flies.

I think I get where you were going with this poem, but I think that it might have been a proposal too?
~ Gee.

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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

you see gf or wifey
is shopping
the guy or bf
is minding kids
gf and bf may not yet be married

I have been to the far East
they mostly first marry..
that's all about it
'tis

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I was about to vanish

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